Feedback From Mike on My Draft Article

Mike, part of the quality control team, has read through my article draft and given me some feedback. Below are the images of the feedback that he gave me and I have also written down the key points that he wanted me to fix.

"-Don't talk about the Strawberry Fair as this would only appeal to people in Cambridge, choose somethnig that would be more wide appeal - perhaps a festival, Glastonbury or V.

- Talk about the down sides of Facebook events, talk about the house party that over 100 people turned up to and the house got ruined - research into this.

- When you talk about people not having the confidence to go out and meet new people, suggest why?; - possibly bullied?, strict parenting or low self-confidence?

- Sometimes online, they speak to random people they will never meet for reasons;

- you can be who you want to be online, argue the point that it is actually a way of making new friends if they don;t have the confidence to meet them in person - maybe a better way online.

- Why do you enjoy sitting in on a friday night? what are the reasons behind this?

-no money, no one to go out with?, lack of motivation?, transport issues?

- What did the older generation do in their time?"